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She was a single mom for long time, but she always took care of me and my brother very well. My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school. If you'd like to revise with a focus on only grammatical issues (as opposed to the questions of style and personal taste that mwestwood addresses above), here's where I would start: There's an article missing in the line "She was a single mom for long time"—the phrase is usually "for a long time." (Articles are tough.) The sentence "My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school" sounds grammatically correct to me, but "studying in grade 10" is a phrase that I've heard less often.
A terrible condition struck me, and I was unable to do anything about it.
In a matter of less than a year, it crushed down all of my hopes and dreams. Even today, when I talk about it, I burst into tears because I feel as though it was yesterday.
She is currently unemployed and now staying at home doing housework. I very much enjoyed your paragraph and the portrait of your family!
He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't has driver . The more typical way to express that idea might be: "My younger brother is in 10th grade at Overfelt High School." (Also, in the name of the high school, the words "high school" are usually capitalized—so "I go to high school" is just fine, but if you say "I go to Overfelt High School" it has to be capitalized as part of the name "Overfelt High School.") "He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't has driver" is really close!
My mother is a great woman who has always taken very good care of my brother and me. She is currently unemployed, and now stays at home doing housework. Although it is technically correct grammar to use "very" before an adjective, it is an unnecessary "throw away word" and makes the sentence clunky.
Unfortunately, she is currently unemployed, but we feel secure with her at home when we are. She was single for a long time, but she took care of my brother and me well. My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt High School. Additionally I took out your sentence "He is very amusing." because you express the same thing in the following sentence with more detail.
I very much enjoyed your paragraph and the portrait of your family!
Perhaps, too, some sentences should be placed in a different part of the paragraph. In brief, we are a small family, but we always spend time together.
Here is a suggested revision: My family is a small one with only three members: my mother, my brother, and I. In addition to correcting the grammar, I have taken out some words that are unnecessary.
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