The reader is looking to round you out and learn some personal details that will help them recommend you for admission. Every student struggles with writing the personal essay required by college applications.Use these for inspiration but start with a completely blank page when you compose your own.I haven't read a lot of good essays in those books anyway.The best transfer essays I've read tell a story that only that writer can tell - about a personal accomplishment or a personal failure, or about a job or volunteer opportunity that lead to a major or career decision.Good essays are always quite personal without being sentimental.Start with a main idea and cite specific evidence to support your statement about yourself. Have your essay edited for misspellings or grammatical errors. Your opinions about apartheid probably aren't nearly as interesting as what you experienced or learned on your internship working with children in the cancer ward.A claim about your transformation into a superior student after languishing in high school might be proven by telling a specific story about becoming passionate about literature in your African American Literature class. Describe your feelings when you found your career or major goals. There is no excuse for presenting yourself in a negative light. Use the essay to tell the admission readers about: This is your chance to fill out your personal story.
I know that this is not a creative writing assignment, but in March after an admissions officer has read thousands of essays, the one that stands out is the one that leaves you with a sense of place and time.These pages will give you some essay writing tips and lead you to other web sites or resources for more help.The admissions department at UC Berkeley will read about 20,000 application essays and Stanford will read about 16,000.That intimidating college application essay is becoming increasingly important for transfer students.Nowadays more transfer essays are read and considered in the admission decision because admission as a transfer student implies that you have a major, maybe even a career, in mind and that you have taken coursework, done internships or worked in your major field.Every admissions office has a story about receiving an essay folded into origami, or embossed on a five pound chocolate bar.These are not amusing at 11 PM after ten hours of essay reading.They have a 20 - something voice, or a 30 - something voice that is yours alone.They aren't so polished and smooth that they read like the work of a pro.Be passionate about your major subject or your career choice. Show intellectual curiosity and the desire to learn and grow in that field. Your essay should have a clear beginning, middle and end.Mention particular faculty at that University you might like to study with. Your essay should read like a short English paper about yourself. Coherence is important—don't wander off your topic. Edit out sentences that don't support your thesis about yourself.